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Scene setting: the Paris Hotel, as I fold
the corner of a page from my Brit Lit
textbook -- story of a boy with French
lips & a Japanese heart.  god, how I miss
his Spanish smile; each dimple, a match-
ing tattoo.   Twice,  he touched my hand

with his heaven-sewn skin.  On the other hand,
my bare body lay on a hotel bed.  Alone.  I fold
my mannequin skeleton like origami   to match
the paper cranes swimming in his Neon eyes, lit
like European stars—Oh, Nostalgia.  how I miss
getting Lost in those foreign eyes during French

class.  Lust in translation.  Lost in a faux-French
Fantasyland.  I want to hold his shivering hand.
Kiss him atop this Eiffel replica.  Alas!  I missed
my chance for our Souls to tango—crashing into the fold
of his hips.  I'm not fluent in body language or candlelit
cuisines or Romance. I can't even strike a Fucking Match

against these naked candles.      So I set the match-
box back by the lamp & bible.  Pardon my French:
Be my Pillow Mint.   Je voudrais te grignoter au lit.
Meet me in the casino.  Play me like a poker hand.
I have a pair of Kings: you & me.  Ante up.  I fold.
      Your cards?  Three-of-un-kind Queens:  Miss

FacebookStatus, Miss Bitch & my favourite: Miss
Understanding.  Biology says we are not a match.
My heart begs to differ.  Sigh.  I might as well fold
these empty bedsheets.  This air tastes like French
fries & heart disease & slot machines & secondhand
smoke.  I am not your ashtray.  Don't leave me lit.

You killed me on the balcony, one star-lit
night.  You and your cocktail harlot, Miss
Scarlet.  The weapon?  Time.  When the   h our hand
struck 12, the dealer ate my wallet.  Game, set, match.
Roulette is not the same in Russia  &   French
kissing is not the same in Las Vegas.  I folded

my legs, doused in kerosene.  You lit the match
on my flesh,  kissed Miss   Right   in her French
maid costume & handed me a pamphlet: "come into the fold"
a sestina ! [link] try writing one (or don't because you probably don't have english 205)

full title: fraīches baguettes, used cigarettes, and the irony of you liking that one status on my facebook. you know, the one where i said i was writing a sestina. betcha didn't think it'd be about you, huh ? well, to be fair, neither did i.

je voudrais te grignoter au lit
i would like to nibble you in bed

in other news: roman reloaded is such a hot track [link]
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Given 2012-03-26
archelyxs Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2012
Congrats on the DD! :heart:
ChloroformBoy Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012
thank you <3
dietcocaine Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2012   Writer
That is amazingly complicated
and absolutely beautiful,
in an offbeat sort of way.
Like gasoline rainbows.
ChloroformBoy Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012
gasoline rainbows !
omg !
dats good !
also: thanks !

BackIntoTheSun Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is such an impressive use of a complicated structure. To be honest, I'd never heard of a sestina before this, but what a nice way to discover it! I think I'll try it (you've inspired me!) I love your use of metaphor, and I LOVED "I fold my mannequin skeleton like origami". I didn't find it smug at all actually, and I've got real issues with self-indulgent poetry. Though I'm sure your professor knows more than me :P

For the record, this is one of the best things I've read online in a very long time. God knows it's a breath of fresh air :D

Sorry sorry sorry for such a long comment.
ChloroformBoy Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012
haha oh my thank yOU <33 sorry for being a bit late
also you should totes write one :3
BackIntoTheSun Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
ahahaha i have now, but it's not as good as yours XD I'll link you to it if you like...? :)
ChloroformBoy Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2012
ok :p
BackIntoTheSun Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
haha you don't have to read it :P
jadesfires Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2012   Writer
This is a captivating piece of work! Certainly deserving of a DD. I am quite impressed with your masterful working of a sestina; that form has always flustered me. It was a genius move to use the French language to have another use of "lit." That line in French made me smile. Curse dA and their obsession with short titles...the real title was much, much better. The imagery was spectacular. The use of enjambment and sentence structure worked very well; it had a nice stream of consciousness feel to it. This is excellent work and a refreshing bit of real literature among all the nonsense posing as such. I hope your instructor appreciated it as much as I do.

You have inspired me, and now I take it as a personal challenge to tackle a sestina. ^^;
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