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The traffic jam on the I-15 locked like a Chinese Fingertrap, every vehicle aligned like some fucked-up map of stars over the skyline of a cemetery.  Hours before the Sun broke down crying, the Moon undressed its craters and tossed them on the floor of some sleazy galaxy avenue.

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Drive faster.
"But this is as fast as I can go."  He spun the wheel the same way he spun his tongue in her mouth: recklessly -- too bad it's not spelt 'wrecklessly'.  He sped across the bedspread boulevard with one hand steering the car and one hand steering the course of his life off the road and into a fucking fire hydrant -- or some other explosive metaphor.

Oh, I want to feel a rush.  Like we used to.  Slam on the gas pedal, and don't stop for anyone.
He ran through the red light the same way he ran his fingers through her hair: absentmindedly -- too bad his subconscious never took roll call.  He pressed against the curb the same way his chest pressed against her spine: hard, fast, and furious -- at a speed of 55 moans per orgasm.

"That was a close call."
Shut up and drive.

Blood spilt from his skull the same way semen-flavoured lies spilt from her lips -- isn't it uncanny how close split and spilt look?  Nothing's off-game with a cracked skull or stale mattress.  I guess one could call it a 'head-on collision with Death', so long as 'head' is used in the right context...

I never said to fucking slow down.  Get your foot off the brakes.
"Yes, sorry, but navigating the curves of the street has lost its thrill."
Just shut up and drive me wild.

The windshield smashed and glass cut his throat the same way she cut his hair -- but never his strings.  He crashed into a semitruck the same way he crashed into her bones: five seconds of consciousness, then waking up in a hospital or a coffin -- if it's the former, they'll be back in another nine months; if it's the latter, well, let's hope no one crashed the funeral...

--

So the Sun doused itself with tears, the Moon (stricken with tumult) lit itself on fire, and the silhouette of an ambulance rained from the cataclysmic anomaly of a carcrash romance.
this is probably a metaphor, but i have no idea.
i should probably be asleep now, but whatever.
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Solaces Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2010
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LOL
I'm just going to skip faving for now because that's too perfect.
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ChloroformBoy Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2010
rofl
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Maybe-Im-Dreaming Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2010  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Fuck.
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:iconchloroformboy:
ChloroformBoy Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2010
F
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Maybe-Im-Dreaming Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2010  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
I was confused by the other two comments until I got to this one. Haha. Devin, you silly boy. :P
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ChloroformBoy Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2010
FFFFFDFGAAF FFFFCCGF
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Maybe-Im-Dreaming Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2010  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
={)
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SorryICantHelpIt Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2010
i've been in a car accident before. D: not fun. but my little brother was laughing his disposable diapers off.
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:iconchloroformboy:
ChloroformBoy Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2010
D:
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SorryICantHelpIt Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2010
i survived. *shrug*
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HelzCullen Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2010
That ending. So the Sun doused itself with tears, the Moon (stricken with tumult) lit itself on fire, and the silhouette of an ambulance rained from the cataclysmic anomaly of a carcrash romance. That ending makes me want to attack you with hugs.
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ChloroformBoy Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2010
hugggggggggggg
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HelzCullen Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2010
:iconhideplz:
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verticalness Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Awesome imagery.
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:iconchloroformboy:
ChloroformBoy Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2010
<3
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ToSeeAButterfly Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2010   Photographer
:la: probably one of my favorites from you!!!!
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:iconchloroformboy:
ChloroformBoy Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2010
really ?
yay :D!
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ToSeeAButterfly Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2010   Photographer
<3
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eternally-writing Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
wow.
the metaphor here is really, truly amazing.
i love the very beginning and very end-how they are the same-ish.
beautiful words
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ChloroformBoy Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2010
thanks.
but no, not beautiful.
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eternally-writing Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
welcome.
and yes.
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EyeOfTheTygr Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2010
Wow. Just... wow. This is amazing. Absolutely brilliant!
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ChloroformBoy Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2010
asgsag thank you so much :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D
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Stuzzi Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2010
I love how you've got three perspectives here in terms of narration. Recklessly brilliant.
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:iconchloroformboy:
ChloroformBoy Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2010
three ? haha
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Stuzzi Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2010
Haha oh well I found three - the character, his internal conflict, and the narrator. Reading too much into it perhaps.
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W-Uno Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2010
This has a pretty grungy tone that I fucking adore. It's angry and violent and it doesn't hold back. It is, in short, very good work.
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ChloroformBoy Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2010
thanks !!!
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roxanne-jasmine Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2010
whhaaaat the fuck.
(in a good way)
<3
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ChloroformBoy Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2010
haha
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Asherlee0099 Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2010
five seconds of consciousness, then waking up in a hospital or a coffin -- if it's the former, they'll be back in another nine months; if it's the latter, well, let's hope no one crashed the funeral...
I adore that!
But the whole thing is absolutely fantastic.
(As usual)
<333
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ChloroformBoy Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2010
[link]
thanks !
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pierrot-lied Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2010
Heya!

I don't think this piece needs to be a metaphor for anything really! It can simply be a piece of delicious literature.

I totally love the comparisons you make between sex and driving. Cos I'm horny. =D
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ChloroformBoy Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2010
lol !
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FirmAsRock Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2010
Totally loved it. Sorry I haven't left a lot of comments lately but haven't had a lot of time for here.
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ChloroformBoy Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2010
ah <3
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Ganymede314 Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2010   Writer
Your abrasive tone sits wonderfully in contrast with the emotional depth of your words. Well done! :clap:
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:iconchloroformboy:
ChloroformBoy Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2010
thanks !!!
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AlterEgo1629 Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I think I just drooled a little. I was in a coma caused from amazing-ness.
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ChloroformBoy Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2010
ahah thanks !
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MaireeMargaret Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
this was brilliant! bloody well brilliant!
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:iconchloroformboy:
ChloroformBoy Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2010
TEXXX
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MaireeMargaret Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
TEXXXAS
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ChloroformBoy Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2010
toast
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MaireeMargaret Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
french toast
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:iconchloroformboy:
ChloroformBoy Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2010
french fries
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MaireeMargaret Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
french kiss
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ChloroformBoy Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2010
cataglottism
[that's actually the word for it !]
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KilCillian Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2010  Professional General Artist
because great minds really do seem to think alike: [link]
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ChloroformBoy Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2010
:D
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